Aphelion

I don't think there was anything that I could specifically put my thumb on, and when I think about it redundant was really the right word...I think a better word would be distracting. When reading stuff about the military, it is acurate to use a lot of jargon because that is how people talk in the m...

I have to say that so far out of the stories that I have read in this issue this is by far my favorite. I love war drama and the near future combat of the story really strikes a chord with a genre I really love. It reminds me of my good ole days playing rifts...<br><br>I loved the description of the...

i have to agree with the above coments...the dialogue is really good and honestly really captures how teens talk to each other...but it just reminded me to much of a Sci-Fi episode of Veronica Mars for my taste...every thing ends happy and nice.<br><br>Really well written though...

I like the zen like ending as well. It is almost like "God" telling him that the path isn't through finding out the "answer", the path is just accepting what is.<br><br>I love the way this is written, the prose is beautiful and descriptive in just the right amount. I also like that it has a little m...

Thank you very much for your coments guys...hopefuly you will be seeing more of my work around. I'm glad that you liked it.