How about "...deciding what to do" or "...deciding what to wish for"?Damian Delao wrote:Yea I can't really decipher that either. I think the sentence may have originally said something else entirely in a previous draft and the author may have missed it. Nothing too crazy that took away from the story though.regrehan wrote:One nitpick: "Once I decided that Nadria was real and I was not drugged in some asylum somewhere, I spent a little more time deciding that most people maybe do."
Huh? What? I don't get it.
"The Woman in the Lamp" by David W. Landrum
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Re: "The Woman in the Lamp" by David W. Landrum
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Re: "The Woman in the Lamp" by David W. Landrum
I loved this story! At first, I thought it was going to be silly, but it soon got serious, and addressed this age-old question with unusual depth and sensitivity. I was really drawn into the story; it's unusual to find a story that makes me care so much about the characters. Mr. Landrum scored a direct hit. Nice that the lamp finally ended up in the hands of someone who could do the right thing with it.
Seems like a few words got dropped here and there; other than that it was seamless and easy to read. A final proofreading would have made it perfect (unless this was some sort of electronic glitch).
I give this one a perfect ten.
Seems like a few words got dropped here and there; other than that it was seamless and easy to read. A final proofreading would have made it perfect (unless this was some sort of electronic glitch).
I give this one a perfect ten.
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Yo no comprendo eso. No tengo la tiza en mi cara!Damian Delao wrote:I've thought of a few variations as well, but I'll just chalk it up to... Your face!Robert_Moriyama wrote:
How about "...deciding what to do" or "...deciding what to wish for"?
You can't wait for inspiration. You have to go after it with a club.
Jack London (1876-1916)
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