Aphelion

Damian Delao wrote:

regrehan wrote:One nitpick: "Once I decided that Nadria was real and I was not drugged in some asylum somewhere, I spent a little more time deciding that most people maybe do."
Huh? What? I don't get it.

Yea I can't really decipher that either. I think the sentence may have originally said something else entirely in a previous draft and the author may have missed it. Nothing too crazy that took away from the story though.

How about "...deciding what to do" or "...deciding what to wish for"?

I loved this story! At first, I thought it was going to be silly, but it soon got serious, and addressed this age-old question with unusual depth and sensitivity. I was really drawn into the story; it's unusual to find a story that makes me care so much about the characters. Mr. Landrum scored a direct hit. Nice that the lamp finally ended up in the hands of someone who could do the right thing with it.

Seems like a few words got dropped here and there; other than that it was seamless and easy to read. A final proofreading would have made it perfect (unless this was some sort of electronic glitch).

I give this one a perfect ten.

Damian Delao wrote:

Robert_Moriyama wrote:
How about "...deciding what to do" or "...deciding what to wish for"?

I've thought of a few variations as well, but I'll just chalk it up to... Your face!

Yo no comprendo eso. No tengo la tiza en mi cara!