andNo one could remember seeing Jack Fuller for at least a year.
inserted into the background narration. Those two especially; they made no sense, since we hadn't met those characters at all yet.Connie MacDonald's daughter was a practicing witch.
Then there's the very short section that's out of sequence. After that, it proceeds in order, but those items are pretty confusing.
Also, I was beginning to expect more from that sword, since you spent quite a bit of wordage on it, but then it just gets chucked when it's no longer any more useful than a stick. That was a bit disappointing; important props should do something notable in a story, like maybe kill the bad guy.
Interesting theme, though, of the guy's progressive descent into animalistic madness.