Shirasawa's Rage by Jay Hill
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- Lester Curtis
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Re: Shirasawa's Rage by Jay Hill
Nice job, Jay! The descriptive prose is very rich, and I rather liked the little life-lessons about the duality of things and the transformative power (both figurative and literal) of a will to overcome.
I was raised by humans. What's your excuse?
- Lester Curtis
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Re: Shirasawa's Rage by Jay Hill
Jay,
I can see Vates' point, but that didn't bother me; the way you covered it was quite satisfactory. Thing is, though, after this experience, she's not going to let herself be caught like that again.
I do look forward to the subsequent episodes; the challenges now have to get bigger!
I can see Vates' point, but that didn't bother me; the way you covered it was quite satisfactory. Thing is, though, after this experience, she's not going to let herself be caught like that again.
I do look forward to the subsequent episodes; the challenges now have to get bigger!
I was raised by humans. What's your excuse?