Aphelion

Nice job, Jay! The descriptive prose is very rich, and I rather liked the little life-lessons about the duality of things and the transformative power (both figurative and literal) of a will to overcome.

Jay,
I can see Vates' point, but that didn't bother me; the way you covered it was quite satisfactory. Thing is, though, after this experience, she's not going to let herself be caught like that again.

I do look forward to the subsequent episodes; the challenges now have to get bigger!