Re: Hullabaroo by Kim Mary Trotto
Posted: August 29, 2014, 09:42:50 PM
I quite liked this one. The dialog and characterization put you right there.
I agree with Eddie that the ending was too 'telly,' but this is what happens when you're stuck with a short format. Not sure it could have been done much better within the confines of a short word limit.
The last line offers fuel for thought. What will she do, anyway?
Very nice, Kim.
I agree with Eddie that the ending was too 'telly,' but this is what happens when you're stuck with a short format. Not sure it could have been done much better within the confines of a short word limit.
The last line offers fuel for thought. What will she do, anyway?
Very nice, Kim.