Re: Singularity by Botond Teklesz
Posted: August 31, 2014, 02:25:59 AM
I saw what seems to be an inconsistency: in paragraph 2, Koepke decides to smoke some weed, but in paragraph 3, it's heroin. If he did both (which would be understandable), you failed to say so.
I like the job you did describing his mental state once all the alcohol and drugs kicked in. Then some friendly alien tries to say hello and gets a dial tone. Maybe one day we'll get to hear some of the jokes they tell about us.
I like the job you did describing his mental state once all the alcohol and drugs kicked in. Then some friendly alien tries to say hello and gets a dial tone. Maybe one day we'll get to hear some of the jokes they tell about us.