Re: That Damned Toothbrush...by Ioana Visan
Posted: July 21, 2016, 10:12:01 AM
The intro worked, but prefer one that grabs my attention better. Nice description, dialogue good and all the elements needed for a short story were present. Taking home an alien would be interesting, and I’m sure swapping stories with an alien over a beer would be interesting too.
I liked the twist at the end, and the concern for the wife!
Good job
I liked the twist at the end, and the concern for the wife!
Good job