Aphelion

Ms. Pillsbury would have been very disappointed in her pest-control service -- er, security firm -- if the paparazzo HAD actually found her. (After all, they charge out-of-this-world prices! ;))

Robert M.

Interesting read, and one that captivated me.

Good description at the beginning, for I could feel the desert and sense the loneliness as
Jamie Mills searched for his ultimate prize: Sandra Pillsbury. I liked the name used.

The poor Paparazzo. Well, they are viewed as pests, and one that get zapped up in a giant
bug-zapper has fulfilled some dreams of many Hollywood celebrities! ( Paris Hilton not included.)

I thought it might be an alien capturing device to transport human back to their home plant, but when I read ‘wisp of burnt smell wafting up towards the stars’ I realized that it must be a bug-zapper. And the crickets returning to their normal night time serenades in only a moment, showed that they are very familiar to the bug-zapper, and it must be used often. Nice!

The story was easy to follow and Feza used good sentence structure and balanced them well. Not sharp breaks or shifts.