Re: They Never Knew By Richard Tornello
Posted: April 12, 2008, 04:55:34 PM
In the end, this was quite enjoyable, as well as just a bit creepy.
A little slow to start, though. I almost gave up on it during the prologue--but kept on because I was wondering if the Song submarine thing was true or not. Looked it up later. If it were me, I would have chopped the prologue. It gave away too much of the ending, and I'm a firm believer that you only get about 200 words to grab a reader's attention.
1st person has a lot of negatives to it, although the splices of different characters' 1st person journal entries kept it fresh by effectively rotating the narrators. However, it might have felt more "real" in third person. Tough to say, considering the epistolary nature of most of the entries.
I'd read more like this, in any case.
Nate
A little slow to start, though. I almost gave up on it during the prologue--but kept on because I was wondering if the Song submarine thing was true or not. Looked it up later. If it were me, I would have chopped the prologue. It gave away too much of the ending, and I'm a firm believer that you only get about 200 words to grab a reader's attention.
1st person has a lot of negatives to it, although the splices of different characters' 1st person journal entries kept it fresh by effectively rotating the narrators. However, it might have felt more "real" in third person. Tough to say, considering the epistolary nature of most of the entries.
I'd read more like this, in any case.
Nate