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Re: [Poll] Vote: September '13 Flash Fiction Contest

Posted: September 24, 2013, 03:54:35 PM
by Lester Curtis
I've got my comments ready and sent my vote.

Re: [Poll] Vote: September '13 Flash Fiction Contest

Posted: September 29, 2013, 11:57:43 PM
by Lester Curtis
Congrats, Iain! Toast yourself with a drink -- just don't use that trophy to chill it with!

Here are my comments, with the numbers I awarded.

The Mortician’s Confession
This one does a good job of emulating the style of the old writers of this kind of work. Nailed the challenge; good treatment of dialog and character, typical of the period. The ending was pretty harshly truncated, though.
Score: 54

Caveat Emptor
A little different plot and outcome than I might have expected, but this one works pretty well. Nice characterization.
Score: 52

Backscratching…
FYI to the author: 'noble woman' should be one word.
A question of historical detail (which I haven't bothered to research): would books in that time be bound as we do today, or would they all still be in the form of scrolls?
Brilliant explanation of what it was about the use of this book that drove people to insanity.
Score: 43

Exeunt Les Amateurs
Trying to bring this into the modern era didn't seem to work too well for me, and worse, nothing really happened to anybody directly in this story. This could serve as a prologue to a longer piece, but fails to stand on its own.
Score: 25

Massive Sink Hole Near Carlsbad, New Mexico; At Least One Confirmed Dead
Well, this one is a start that certainly demands an ending, especially with the last line. Nice angle on the challenge. Dialog needed improvement.
Score: 37

Re: [Poll] Vote: September '13 Flash Fiction Contest

Posted: October 05, 2013, 10:35:26 AM
by Megawatts
Congrats to Iain Muir. Interesting story, and I loved the ending! Could one say that the customer was 'Well Read.'

Re: [Poll] Vote: September '13 Flash Fiction Contest

Posted: October 18, 2013, 03:08:07 PM
by Lester Curtis
Freefall is only a little behind us . . .

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