Re: Veld Opal by Jens Rushing
Posted: March 31, 2007, 05:30:05 PM
I was not overly blown away by this one.
I only barely made it past the hook, never empathized with the hero, felt the pace was slow, couldn't see enough description to tell what the heck was going on when they landed in the city (chased by 50-foot mutants, or maybe the dead, er... what?), and then was left very flat by then ending. Why did Hanjan just walk away from the jewel and the money? He needed it to pay his bills/bounty, ala Han Solo.
There was no resolution.
Nate
I only barely made it past the hook, never empathized with the hero, felt the pace was slow, couldn't see enough description to tell what the heck was going on when they landed in the city (chased by 50-foot mutants, or maybe the dead, er... what?), and then was left very flat by then ending. Why did Hanjan just walk away from the jewel and the money? He needed it to pay his bills/bounty, ala Han Solo.
There was no resolution.
Nate