Boundaries by Bob Bignell
Posted: January 11, 2007, 09:34:30 PM
Space story along the lines of Star Trek. The beginning eases into the story with a problem that has just developed. And the story centers around that problem until the end.
I love space stories and did enjoy reading this one, but I found it to be a little typical. Trapped on a planet with their reactor about to blow up is nothing new.
The characters didn’t come alive with me. I could hardly visualize them and didn’t feel as if I were in the story, watching from within.
But I do see talent that wrote this story, an imagination that knows how to use English, and take a story to its end, stylishly.
I think a little more sensory input is needed. Show how Domine looks, show how worried he is becoming. Interject the sights and sounds of the station with the smell of ozone or a reference to the artificial atmosphere. Little details go a long way in getting the reader into the story.
All in all not bad!
I love space stories and did enjoy reading this one, but I found it to be a little typical. Trapped on a planet with their reactor about to blow up is nothing new.
The characters didn’t come alive with me. I could hardly visualize them and didn’t feel as if I were in the story, watching from within.
But I do see talent that wrote this story, an imagination that knows how to use English, and take a story to its end, stylishly.
I think a little more sensory input is needed. Show how Domine looks, show how worried he is becoming. Interject the sights and sounds of the station with the smell of ozone or a reference to the artificial atmosphere. Little details go a long way in getting the reader into the story.
All in all not bad!