Re: Go On, Go There by Ben Ayers
Posted: January 27, 2007, 03:41:49 PM
Very hard to follow, and I didn't get the ending, if there was a point to get.
This reminded me of a 'stream of consciouness' story where the author puts down his/her thoughts at ramdom, and sometime his/her thoughts will connect like a story?
The writting was good. The character developement needs worked on, and sensory input sould have been introduced. Even in a dream state we can hear and feel and smell.
The book 'Slaughterhouse Five' by Kurt Vonegut came to my attention as I was reading this story. Maybe going back and forth in time---which Vonegut did--- had something to do with my connecting to two together.
Did he enter a monastery? Was he a soldier seriously wounded in the battlefield, and as his life slipped away, were these his thoughts? I don't know.
I can't say that I liked the story, yet I didn't hate it!
This reminded me of a 'stream of consciouness' story where the author puts down his/her thoughts at ramdom, and sometime his/her thoughts will connect like a story?
The writting was good. The character developement needs worked on, and sensory input sould have been introduced. Even in a dream state we can hear and feel and smell.
The book 'Slaughterhouse Five' by Kurt Vonegut came to my attention as I was reading this story. Maybe going back and forth in time---which Vonegut did--- had something to do with my connecting to two together.
Did he enter a monastery? Was he a soldier seriously wounded in the battlefield, and as his life slipped away, were these his thoughts? I don't know.
I can't say that I liked the story, yet I didn't hate it!