Aphelion

This is an interesting story . . . I don't see ESP stories very often. What I liked best about it was the hard-science approach, with convincing depth and detail concerning the medical aspects of it.

Not all of the characters are well-developed -- and they don't all need to be -- but a couple of them were just names on the page and little else.

The thing that bothered me most was the way quotes were arranged -- separate sentences of a continuous quote were frequently separated by a double line space and put in quotation marks, as though they might be spoken by a different character. That was very distracting, and caused me to have to backtrack and sort out the dialog.

This might be my fault -- in the editing / formatting process, I sometimes insert additional paragraph breaks when I think the speaker has changed or when a paragraph seems to describe actions by the main character and actions by another character. If I misread the text, and mistakenly believe that the speaker has changed, I may insert inappropriate paragraph breaks in the middle of one character's speech. (Of course, if the character talks that much without interruption, he/she might as well be GIVING a speech...)

RM