A Lack of Power By K. W. Ramsey
Posted: May 16, 2010, 11:28:24 PM
This is a cheerful little jaunt (mostly) into office politics . . . a fun read, for the most part, with an object lesson for the oppressors of the downtrodden.
I did experience a profound disconnect early on, though . . . while John is on the elevator, that flowery-smelling brunette seems to have exited the elevator -- without ever having gotten on . . . ? It's a bit unclear. Re-reading the passage, it seems she got on at a different floor and then got off again, but I was confused.
I think the technical jargon was maybe slightly overdone, but it was all delivered with the voice of authority (as in, personal familiarity).
A little rough in spots, but a good job, all considered.
I did experience a profound disconnect early on, though . . . while John is on the elevator, that flowery-smelling brunette seems to have exited the elevator -- without ever having gotten on . . . ? It's a bit unclear. Re-reading the passage, it seems she got on at a different floor and then got off again, but I was confused.
I think the technical jargon was maybe slightly overdone, but it was all delivered with the voice of authority (as in, personal familiarity).
A little rough in spots, but a good job, all considered.