Page 1 of 1

Posted: August 09, 2010, 10:36:02 PM
by Lester Curtis
Action/adventure: check.
Setting: check.
Style: terse, crisp, and fast to read, but with a hint of shrillness.
Character development: two-dimensional at best.
Conflict/resolution: absent.

Sorry, Gary, but you haven't given us any reason to care about these characters; they're action figures, not human beings. You have good guys and bad guys and nothing in between. I'm tempted to call this "Charlie's Angels in Space." Well, all right, I just did. I can be a real bastard sometimes. Maybe I'll agonize over that, wondering if I was too harsh on you.

Nah. Well, maybe not, but -- gee, I hate to hurt people's feelings -- but you really need a bastard right now, and maybe you'll thank me later. I hope.

See how that works?

Posted: August 10, 2010, 12:51:33 AM
by Lester Curtis
Was this in one of the stories? I've only read a few so far.
Yep. "Jenny Ogiwara and the AntiFems."

Oh, and I forgot to ask earlier -- as to this whole YC thing, have you got a plausible, compelling reason for a bunch of folks to go to the enormous trouble of making a whole such sub-species? Someone besides me is bound to ask sooner or later . . .