First person stories always get the reader into them. This story is more of a scene or act focused on and taken from a larger story or possibly an epic.
Are the foxes good looking girls? They just might be. Is the narrator drunk or high? He just might be! Would I like to be in that castle? Hell yes, as long as I had my 8MM Mauser, or my 30-30. And a bottle of wine just in case. The guns are just for protection and nothing else.
I like it as it stands. Can’t find anything to nit-pick about.
Pretty little Foxes by Lester Curtis
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Pretty little Foxes by Lester Curtis
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Re: Pretty little Foxes by Lester Curtis
Thank you both for you nice comments.
I submitted this one for the Halloween challenge, but it got booted because the evil beasties weren't traditional werewolves.
It might help if your bullets were silver and/or you substituted holy water for that vino. They're lycanthropes.Would I like to be in that castle? Hell yes, as long as I had my 8MM Mauser, or my 30-30. And a bottle of wine just in case.
I submitted this one for the Halloween challenge, but it got booted because the evil beasties weren't traditional werewolves.
I was raised by humans. What's your excuse?
Re: Pretty little Foxes by Lester Curtis
I didn't know what a lycanthropes was. I Looked up. interesting!
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