A Drop In The Well by Shawn Montgomery
Posted: November 20, 2011, 10:21:42 PM
About halfway through this story, I was seriously wondering when it was going to get to some point, other than detailing a minute-by-minute listing of non-events.
Then, by the time something did finally happen, it didn't make sense. That annoyed me, and I was already annoyed by the pointless detail of the first half of it.
The rest of it, clear to the end, continued to not make sense.
Well, okay . . . it seems that every person in the bar went to their own personal hell. Only the narrator survived. When I got to THE END, all I could think was that I'd just wasted my time.
Maybe this will creep out some of the rest of you, but for me, it failed.
Then, by the time something did finally happen, it didn't make sense. That annoyed me, and I was already annoyed by the pointless detail of the first half of it.
The rest of it, clear to the end, continued to not make sense.
Well, okay . . . it seems that every person in the bar went to their own personal hell. Only the narrator survived. When I got to THE END, all I could think was that I'd just wasted my time.
Maybe this will creep out some of the rest of you, but for me, it failed.