Coils in the Dark by M. N. Tarrint

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Coils in the Dark by M. N. Tarrint

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Re: Coils in the Dark by M. N. Tarrint

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Not too bad. I didn't know how it was going to turn out, and the ending wasn't quite what I might have expected.

The author needs very much to do one thing with this story -- use some kind of separator, like # or * to signify scene changes. I got thrown three or four times by big jumps in the timeline that came with no warning.

Otherwise, creepy and cool.
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