Some would call that a feature, not a bug. :)I think things were a bit too compressed here. These events were coming way too fast for me to believe they were happening in real time. I do like the style of the story, although as one person pointed out, it is pretty old school.
I loved this story. The pace may be a bit fast, but I think the rush is important. This story runs on adrenaline, and if you let it take too long to spool out you won't have that roller coaster plummet at the end.
The auto-logout was a great touch.